Thursday, April 21, 2011

Again

The moon was rising
Above the rooftop
Rising above the trees

Its brilliance is hazily beautiful 
Even though someone
Something

Has taken a scoop
From the moon again?
No worries...

The moon is gracious
It gives of itself
Until it is no more

But returns again
Bright in the sky
With it's borrowed light

Ready to become full again
To give again
Then to leave, for a moment

Again 



This is my entry for Thursday Poets Rally Week 42....let's go see what else is there.




My thanks to
Vinay and Jingle



My nomination goes to




26 comments:

Charlie Parant said...

really like the clever writing on this...nice poem

Reggie said...

Charlie, thanks for stopping by...I appreciate your comment...thank you.

lynnaima said...

awww sweet moon, I like the moon, sweet and kind, giving, like most women I know :)
http://lynnaima.wordpress.com/2011/04/22/on-peace-and-wisdom-haiku-poem-ing-on/

Jingle said...

love moon imagery, well done.

Brian Miller said...

smiles. the moon is such a muse...yet always constant...

JL Dodge said...

love that scoop line... very nice !
Happy Rally
ENJOY
JL&B

Peggy said...

Loved the middle section:

"Even though someone
Something

Has taken a scoop
From the moon again?
No worries...

The moon is gracious
It gives of itself
Until it is no more"

Couple of things...

"It's brilliance" should be "its brilliance." 'It's' is the contraction of it is, so "it is brilliance" makes no sense.

Also you start out in passive past tense then switch to passive present tense. What if you switched to active present tense - this would draw the reader in even more.

bendedspoon said...

Real lovely. Thanks to ever giving moon :)

fiveloaf said...

nice.. my thursday post : http://fiveloaf.wordpress.com/2010/06/20/me-before-us/

thingy said...

It's beautiful, Reggie. As is.

irisinbloom said...

A cute take on the scoop of moon and its giving nature comparing it to mankind. Sweet poem.
Iris

Vinay said...

Wow. what a beautiful image of the moon :) I liked it. Very nicely said!

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lunawitch15 said...

well,
I bet you can guess how I feel about this poem...
loved it. Really loved it. AWESOME!!!! :)

Luna

kez said...

so good to have a constant in our lives and you put it so well ..thank you

lonelyrecluse said...

An accord with my lunar loving soul has been struck by your words Reggie. A beautiful poem.
The Lonely Recluse.

Reggie said...

lynnaima, it's nice to have friends who are there. ;-)

Jingle, as bright as the moon has been, I'm happy to have been able to see what I was inspired by.

Yes it is Brian....yes it is...smiles

Thank you JL Dodge

Peggy, hi...I guess in my hurry to post I slept through a couple of things...yes you are right concerning both points. One I will fix for sure and the other I will leave.

This is not a throw back at you by any means...it's just a part of me. I will choose to live with the past and present mistake.

It will be a reminder....I know of several other posts that are in my thoughts at times, but I choose to let it be. Some I will change because...well, let's face it...it has to be changed.

One more thing...and forgive me for being so long. When I read a poem and I like it, it "was" a good poem to read, but...it still "is" a good poem to read. So the term "was is" makes all the sense in the world to me....but that's just me.

In all sincerity, thank you for stopping by and enjoying your read. My door is always open.

Hi bended...yes it is a joy to behold...thanks for stopping in.

Thanks fiveloaf

Your very kind thingy :-)

Hi Iris...I'm glad you liked it...yeah, I was sitting there and it looked as if it was tried to be had, but that was all he/she/whatever could get :-)

Hi Vinay, I cherish your appreciation...thank you.

luna...I have been smitten with a big smile across my face...thank you!

Kez...kind of you to say, and welcome

Hi Recluse, your beautiful words of appreciation have brought me smiles...:-)

moonscribbles said...

as a moon addict, i like the way you talk about the moon....and yes the moon is gracious...
your poem is beautiful..

Jingle Poetry said...

Hello:

You have won The Perfect Poet Award Week 42, Due to your performance in the present or previous Poets Rally!

Please leave a link under the award post after you take it,

This award will Not be given to poets who reject it or previously rejected it.

Happy Writing, Thanks for the support!

torquethis said...

Kudos, very nice.

raivenne said...

Ah Luna! This is just one of her enduring charms. No matter how much we take she is indeed always able to return to us full to give more. I like this a lot.

Walt Wojtanik said...

Reggie, inspiring and impressive. Thanks for that.

Reggie said...

Moonscribbles, that is very kind of you to say...thank you.

Jingle Poetry, I am honored to have been nominated and will accept the award...thank you.

torquethis, thank you and thanks for stopping in.

raivenne, I'm glad you enjoyed this.

Walt, thank you and you are more than welcome.

deep said...

Talking of the moon like that, leaving and borrowed light and comes back again - it is very inspiring. :)

Promising Poets Parking Lot said...

How are you?
Please consider making a contribution to poets rally week 43 today,
A free verse is appreciated, you rock!
Happy Friday!
Hope to see you in!
Happy Mother’s Day to Moms in your family.
xoxox





thanks for the award acceptance.

Reggie said...

Hi deep, it is the moon that inspires.

Promising Poets, I have an old one I can link in, and thank you for the Mother's Day greeting and the same to all of you.

Isabel said...

Congrats on the award!

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